"Milly" by rkshooter

[jules]

Dear rkshooter
I just discovered Milly and first of all I have say that I admire your work.
I find it truly erotic an it surely is art. (I´m an artist myself,I do sculptures)
Especially the biginning is brilliant. The szene with the breast contest for example
where the mood of Ben changes, enjoying it more and more. There is so much tension in that szene!
And you are playing around with stereotypes very nicely. I also like that it stops and does not end in an orgy!
I have to say though that later on I miss some of the quality of the beginning.
There is not that much psychologic tension and there is more porn.
There is also a change in the point of view. All the beginning is more or less about the adventures of Ben. Reading it you automaticly empathise with Ben. But in the szenes in Millys holiday for exampel you can´t empathise with someone
I´m still very excited about how it will go on...

I could imagine an ending:
Milly and Ben are finally having sex. It´s all great but somehow Milly finds out how much sex Ben had with all her girlfriends and her sister...does she ask? does Ben tell her? Maybe they talk about all their adventures flirting with each other...but the flirt gets more and more sincere... till they start yelling...
They have sex again and it´s not great at all anymore and ......Milly leaves Ben!
Don´t give it a happy end! PLEASE!!!

Did you ever think about a printed version? Maybe some day you will go back and work the whole story over...


All the best for your work
Jules

[Arnulf]

Hi, rkshooter an jules, there may be a lot of truth in your words, jules, but it is a very sensible job to continue such a story to an endless, but enjoying and satisfying shape. I know very well, that the consumers generally are interested in a slight increase of the pornografic content. Threre is to watch a general developement of porns, for example the improvement of the close-up photografy or similar techniques. And to match the permanent rising of the demands of the users together with the continuance of some artistic or psychological level in the storyline is a very difficult thing.

As to my opinion, the story can go various ways, but real and loving sex between Milly and Ben would be the culminating happy ending of the whole story. Therefore, as long as Milly and Ben are going their ways, always being caught in their desire for coming together but without finding this happy ending, the story will go on and that is it, what the users want.

[David]

SimpleSimon wrote : Is it just me I can't down load the latest episode from rapidshare?

I just downloaded it without any problems.

[jules]

Well...Arnulf
Copying what once was good never works in art. The origin of art is to be new, to be original. To do copies is the end of art ...
I´m sure rkshooter will find other exciting situations...
Isn´t real porn always more real? The advantage of a story is the imagination and yes, the psychology...
And maybe it´s sometimes important to end something, just to be able to do something new ...
(just an opinion)

[Squeeky]

"Like sands through the hourglass, so are the days of our lives." - quote from a verrrrry, verrrrry long 'soapie' coming out of the USA, "Days of Our lives".

It has spanned more than 3 decades. Will Milly be in a wheelchair (or maybe rkshooter) when the series ends?

Yes, I feel that it would be good terminate this reasonably quickly and then move on. Maybe rkshooter might, in consultation with Shark so as not impinge on works in progress, take some inspiration from some of the game threads that have drifting around the lagoon.

[rkshooter]

"Yes, I feel that it would be good terminate this reasonably quickly and then move on". ........IF that is what you want......I can arrange it....but.......is that what most Sharkies want is my question.

[redirection]

Where do i find the game?

[Arnulf]

in Sharks lagoon (link on top of this page)

[Greebo]

The question really is what do YOU want RKS? If you're anything like me, I find input from others can be helpful if I'm unsure of the way I'd like a story to go, but when it comes down to it I'm writing for myself but wondering whether others would find it interesting. Unfortunately I haven't developed an artistic talent like yours so my own creativity is limited to text and is mainly for my own amusement.

I'd be surprised if you don't have strong ideas about which way you'd like Milly's tale to go even if you like some of the suggestions you get and you would probably be foolish to let your tale get warped into a shape you weren't happy with. I know that the possible ways I would like it to develop differ from quite a few Sharkies views but I'd like the RKS view to prevail when it comes down to it.

[smjar]

The way I see it and it's like assholes everyone has one. RKS, it's like Greebo said you have to be happy with your ending. This story could go on forever if you wanted it to. Relly in my opinion, I would like to see Milly trained a little more. Since there has been talk of her pussy being so tight maybe she should go through some stretching exercises. After all she is suppose to take on Kyle's huge cock. I think the scene where Robert is looking at his collection of women could be turned into where Milly and her new found friend are taken out of the comatose state because he is not happy with their complete training of being purely submissive. Ben could be lead on a wild goose chase at first before he gets to her. This could lead Ben into going to different places looking for Milly. Ben could be looking for Milly with the help of Milly's friends and sister. The first goose chase that Ben is going on could be where the "auctions" are to take place and not where the women are really kept. This could get real interesting and fun. But I love your imagination and the story line. I wish I could run into Milly and her friends myself.

[Arnulf]

Yes, Rkshooter, I fully am on the side to let you continue the story as you can follow your fantasy. Don't let you bring into a trap as far as some sharkies would try to get influence. We should be aware that the story could have a lot of different ways to be continued, especially now, as we can see that Ben has got a very seroius problem with Suzan. So I can imagine that the story would have some sideways which would lead to a wide bow of different sequences. That is the ulitmate enjoyment and so I only can say: Keep going that way!

[drdjkkm]

Where can I find chapter 16? I don't see it on either of the pages.

[Arnulf]

drdjkkm, You just find chapter 16 on page 1, the last item

[drdjkkm]

Everytime I go into Milly's chapters, page 1 ends with 14 and page 2 starts at 17, so both 15 & 16 are missing.

[Arnulf]

I absolutely cannot understand your problem, maybe you should use another browser, but in order to give you a quick help, I give you the download link for chapter 16: http://rapidshare.com/files/99199833/MILLY_16.zip.html