Re: Life With Keeley Refresh
Posted: Fri, 15Mar06 03:14
Hi, Tlaero!
Great refresh for Life with Keeley. I hope you will refresh Coffee for Keisha, too (Or even better, write a new episode for her) - it is by far your best story, and Keisha is an amazing character. It feels almost like she is alive. The only problem with Keisha - her sex scenes are never given from the right point of view. Eg, the MMF scene (amazing intro, great development), everything is a thrill there, and then when she is taken by both guys, you only show closeups, no total frame, with both guys seen doing her simoultaneously, and her face. And yes, her face needs to show some additional excitement during sex. If you want to spice up your stories a little more, although they are already rocking, you may make guys "earn" (prove worthy of) some special sexual experience with Keisha or other girls. Eg, if you want this, you must do this and that for her, quid pro quo.
Great refresh for Life with Keeley. I hope you will refresh Coffee for Keisha, too (Or even better, write a new episode for her) - it is by far your best story, and Keisha is an amazing character. It feels almost like she is alive. The only problem with Keisha - her sex scenes are never given from the right point of view. Eg, the MMF scene (amazing intro, great development), everything is a thrill there, and then when she is taken by both guys, you only show closeups, no total frame, with both guys seen doing her simoultaneously, and her face. And yes, her face needs to show some additional excitement during sex. If you want to spice up your stories a little more, although they are already rocking, you may make guys "earn" (prove worthy of) some special sexual experience with Keisha or other girls. Eg, if you want this, you must do this and that for her, quid pro quo.