by Thrain » Mon, 14Jan27 17:35
I missed this game too last year.
It's nice for a first attempt.
Technicaly nothing to say. Using tools from Tlaero is a very good idea. Tools don't do every thing but that help alot !
Graphic and animation are both good. Same for points of view choice.
But I don't like too much the story.
Why ? Mainly because Tlaero put standard high ^^
Basis characters are good but I really don't like interaction between them.
For exemple, for the treesome, Lilly suddenly ask Mia to come ! Why ? Nothing prepare us in the story to that.
In several part of the game situations come from nowhere. I mean there no previous hint that situation may involve in that direction.
Even if it somewhere logical. For exemple with the boss, if you refuse, you are not fired. That comes as "Deus ex machina". Same with losing point with Mia if your obey to the boss. Why ?
An other exemple: Dirk see you with Mia in bathroom and blackmail you to Lilly. Only if you go at certain limit. Nothing in game give you a hint on what is append. Maybie something as simple as, "You feel watched" during handjob scene may avoid that.
That the nightmare of writing a story. The story need to logical (not realist but logical) with player point of view, but also out of scene action.
Top story with very good interaction between character is "Something in the air" from ArianeB !
Whatever, it's really a good start. Good job !