Aaron's life

[Dakutis]

Seems like Coffee stole most of your thunder =C Shame, I hope it doesn't stop you from making another game though.

Were you thinking of asking leonizer about adding it to playforceone?

3000 downloads of my game I think is good result for my first game. I don't stop create games.

[Josefus]

Hi Dakutis,


Thanks for this game. A very good job. Yes i like it.
What use you to make this pictures..?
3DSexvilla2? --Filmmake-modus .
In my shnapshoots are the controlelements. How you make this pictures?

2. Is this allowed?

[LucaNatoli]

Kudo's for the game.

For your first game, this is great. Great work on this, are you thinking about doing more games?

If you do, keep up the good work. This release was good.

[ThorOdinsbain5]

hey, for some reason, the file wont play for me. My computer keeps trying to use adobe to open it. what should I do?

[jfrancois323]

Did you try it with another browser, maybe the browser you use doesn't like it ??

[Greebo]

hey, for some reason, the file wont play for me. My computer keeps trying to use adobe to open it. what should I do?

Did you unpack the .rar file? You should have ended up with a folder containing a files folder and a start.html file which you need to click on. There's no reason why Adobe should try opening a .html file.

[tlaero]

I finally got some time to try other people's games. Is anyone having trouble downloading Aaron's Life? I click the "regular download" button on hotfile, wait the 15 seconds, and then nothing happens. My browser says, "Waiting for hotfile." I've left it there for half an hour. Has anyone seen anything like this with Hotfile and how did you work around it?

Tlaero

[Rikwar]

I finally got some time to try other people's games. Is anyone having trouble downloading Aaron's Life? I click the "regular download" button on hotfile, wait the 15 seconds, and then nothing happens. My browser says, "Waiting for hotfile." I've left it there for half an hour. Has anyone seen anything like this with Hotfile and how did you work around it?

Tlaero

Just tried the hotfile download and worked fine Tlaero using IE8, when you get the hotfile link at the top of the page you get a narrow rectangular bar you need to clic on it and accept the active X

Rik

[Dakutis]

Hi to all, I am very glad that you liked my game (at least some of you).
Tlaero - I don't know what is the problem that you can't dowload it, I will send you in private other link, in my dropbox acc. I don't to give it to all because two times when I gave it, my dropbox acc was blocked because of a large traffic. If anyone have same problem like Tlaero write me and I give you other link.

To Josefus - yes I use 3Dsexvilla2, and controlelements are only when I record video, but I cut it.

To LucaNatoli - I yes I think about create more games. I have ideas for few games, for one I already write base scripts. Now I want to create game with one of Aaron's life characters. In that game I want to answer some of the questions that remained unanswered in the previous the game. I'm now a little ran out of ideas, and I still have a problem with the text.

The game already have over 4300 downloads.

[Greebo]

Using Firefox under Ubuntu linux I thought the download had failed, but for some reason the usual little downloads window hadn't appeared on top of the open apps and was hiding underneath. Don't forget that the .rar file is 230MB and takes quite a while to download fully.

[tlaero]

I played Aaron's Life and enjoyed it. It was fun to play a modern Adventure Creator game that I didn't write. I could see first hand how things like save/restore and a score worked for the gameplay. You did a nice job with the code. It's clean and works well. I die a little inside when I look at the code in some of these games.

You made good use of the sexvilla graphics. Those games are in severe need of a story, and you added a nice one.

My favorite part of the story was the apparent tension from having a female friend staying at your place while you're going out with another woman. There's a LOT that could be done with that.

In the sex scenes, I suggest smaller hit targets that guide the action. If the next move is to kiss her, make the hit target just be her lips. Often you had whole screen continues instead. Or, when you had targets, they covered a large part of the screen. A few times I was surprised by what happened because I clicked in one place and something in a different place changed. It's a little more interactive if you have to click a breast to touch it, or click the bottom of a shirt to pull it up, etc.

Also, I suggest you always have clicking on the picture be for things you do and clicking on the table entries be for things you say. Sometimes you mixed the two which interrupts the flow.

English isn't your first language, and that's fine. I didn't mind the various places where you used Russian phrasing with English words. Your English is MUCH better than my Russian and it's impressive that you're writing in a non-native language. However, you could still work on the storytelling. Try to do this: Make every sentence advance the story in some way. That means, if you have a sentence that doesn't advance the story, either change it to make it advance the story, or remove it. For instance:

(You:) "Bye everyone!" (Lilly:) "Goodbye" (Mia:) "Bye" (Lilly:) "Bye."

4 sentences for about one sentence worth of story. Instead try something like, "Everyone says goodbye and you head home."

Or, "You close the door."

The previous image had the door open. The current one has it closed. We know we closed the door. You don't need to use words to tell us what happened unless something about them is interesting and important to the story. "The door creaks as you shut it," so that, later on you hear the door creak when you're in another room, and you know someone came home. Etc.

This isn't so much about English as it is about writing. Both are HARD, but you're off to a good start. Keep up the great work.

Tlaero

[jfrancois323]

How did you get the ending with the shower girl ??

Thank in advance !!

[Dakutis]

Thank you Tlaero for your feedback, for me it is important.
About smaller hit targets: I made it bigger because sometimes its hard to find it (at least for me). I even didn't know that I use Russian phrasing. My native language is not Russian, but I know it maybe a little more than English.
About storytelling I tryed to fix it, but how you see something passed through my eyes.


to jfrancois323 - you are talking about shower in gym? Then in what place do you stuck?

[jfrancois323]

I don't know, but in the thread, someone speak about a mmf with the shower girl. This is the ending i search !!

[Dakutis]

I don't know, but in the thread, someone speak about a mmf with the shower girl. This is the ending i search !!

In the gym shower go to the end, then when you have to choose to call to Mia or Dirk - choose Dirk.