Hi everybody,

I am a big fan a sharks games and many other games announced on this forum. Recently I had time and little money to spend so I created my own game. It's a html visual novel. I have developed the first part by myself (programmation and art) and I would like to submit it to your comments and reviews. If you are interested in helping me by improving dialogs and translating please let me know (english is not my mother tongue so help for english corrections would be much appreciated).

If your feedbacks are positive I will develop next parts of the game. For this any help will be very welcome for dialogs and testings (and even art). Please PM me if you are interested.

download link v0.1.1 (to play offline): http://www.mediafire.com/download/uuczu ... v0.1.1.zip or http://ul.to/qx4piyff

update 0.1.2: full download --> http://ul.to/np2izjay
updater v0.1.1to v0.1.2 --> http://ul.to/39jkirc4 (unzip and copy/paste in your v0.1.1 directory)

update 0.1.3: full download --> http://ul.to/buocothy
updater v0.1.1/v0.1.2 to v0.1.3 --> http://www.mediafire.com/download/dmk5g ... v0.1.3.zip or http://ul.to/l9b9qg9s (unzip and copy/paste in your v0.1.1/v0.1.2 directory)


update 1.0.2
download the game to play offline at http://ul.to/gbxoi5rr. Launch index.html in firefox.
online link: http://www.bobbytally.byethost12.com (the server seems to be very slow)


update 1.0.3 (bug correction)
full game: http://ul.to/dsyekqpc
updater from v1.0.2 (extract archive in the game directory): http://ul.to/nz9rp67y



The game has been developed and tested with firefox. Online version seems to work fine in chrome but offline version does not because of security issue (actually you need to disable same origin policy with the command line <path to chrome\chrome.exe --allow-file-access-from-files --disable-web-security>). The game has not been tested at all on other browsers.

Hope you will enjoy.

cheers
BobbyTally

Wow! That was great. I love the presentation and your 3D models are excellent.

Excellent so far, and the posing looks quite good to me.

I would suggest remove (clothing) rather than undress (clothing), but apart from that the English wording appears to be pretty good.

Pretty good so far, will echo Greebo's suggestion of "Remove" rather than "Undress". But otherwise good. Want to see what you've got in store.

Is there anything beyond getting undressed and going to bed at the moment?

Superawesomemans wrote:Is there anything beyond getting undressed and going to bed at the moment?

You mean you haven't seen all the forks yet? Look for alternatives!

Thank you for your positive comments. I really appreciate.

Greebo wrote:

Superawesomemans wrote:Is there anything beyond getting undressed and going to bed at the moment?

You mean you haven't seen all the forks yet? Look for alternatives!

But I tried hovering my mouse all over the screen. And I can't press tab to go through all the options like in most HTML games XD

Oh well, now that I know there is more, I'll try searching more... later.

Bravo pour le graphisme.
Le jeu est très sympa.

Il reste quelques coquilles dans les textes (en français). Je peux aider pour proposer une correction (en MP).

Sinon, c'est vraiment excellent !

Good game, some zone can be a bit small to find without hints (looking at the missed pictures).

Is there a time limit for the door knock? I saw a white text "door" on my first TV path but never found it again when moving back the mouse over the door before replaying.

Superawesomemans wrote:But I tried hovering my mouse all over the screen. And I can't press tab to go through all the options like in most HTML games XD

Initially I had planned to have an option to reveal hotspots but I think the game would have lost all interest so I let you find them by yourself

BobbyTally wrote:

Superawesomemans wrote:But I tried hovering my mouse all over the screen. And I can't press tab to go through all the options like in most HTML games XD

Initially I had planned to have an option to reveal hotspots but I think the game would have lost all interest so I let you find them by yourself

While I can see your point, playing 'hunt the pixel' isn't particularly fun. At the very least I'd suggest enlarging the hotspots. I'd also suggest getting someone to proof-read the text for you. There are a few errors, plus some odd word choices (unconfessed, mentoree).

Best of luck.

ExLibris wrote:

BobbyTally wrote:

Superawesomemans wrote:But I tried hovering my mouse all over the screen. And I can't press tab to go through all the options like in most HTML games XD

Initially I had planned to have an option to reveal hotspots but I think the game would have lost all interest so I let you find them by yourself

While I can see your point, playing 'hunt the pixel' isn't particularly fun. At the very least I'd suggest enlarging the hotspots. I'd also suggest getting someone to proof-read the text for you. There are a few errors, plus some odd word choices (unconfessed, mentoree).

Best of luck.

Thanks for your comment. Actually find the pixel is the principle of all adventure games including sharks game, isn't it ? But you're right some spots are too small, I will enlarge them.

Hi BobbyTally,
I think your game is great and I'm looking forward to more. Congratulations on an excellent piece of work!
I think your artwork is really, really good. Definitely a strength of this game; I really like the look of the whole thing.
I understand when people say the "find the pixel" mechanic is a pain in the butt, but for me, the better the artwork, the more willing I am to explore it looking for a pixel. But I would make sure to always make the "find a pixel" target an interesting part of the image, and if it's not, then make it larger/a full object. So what I mean is, if the pixel the player needs to find is a sexy part of the girl's body, go ahead and make it hard to find; I think it's fun to look so closely at such a sexy image. But if it's not part of the image, then make it the full size of whatever object is the choice (e.g., the whole dildo, the whole door, etc...)

I really hope you continue to work on this. I suggest the girls have a shower together and a couple of well-hung dudes that shoot huge cumshots come in and find them, and it turns into a bit of an orgy!! (Get used to the requests, and think of them as flattery - requests come from fans).

Nice stuff,
iksanabot

It's a real nice start.

As you said yourself, it could use an editor to read through it and fix some of the typos/grammar. They weren't too bad and everything was fully readable, but errors only lessen the experience.

Next thing I'd suggest: add in some means of the player knowing when they are simply advancing the story. Pixel hunting games can, at times, cause frustration on their own, but it's much worse when one spends a great deal of time hunting all around the screen and there actually are no options. Case-in-point, the first screen where Maya is sitting at her desk, I probably spent 2-3 minutes trying to see what my opening options were (and of course there isn't any but the 'click anywhere to continue'). One option is to put some default text such as 'Continue' or 'Advance story.' Another option is to put some button-like icon or graphic that shows up when there are no choices to be made. I did eventually learn that a lack of text from the tooltip was the indicator for this. But browsers aren't always the best with tooltips to begin with, and I often get no text even when I should see text (or the text doesn't follow the cursor). So it is hard to differentiate between a no-text continue and a no-text, tooltip browser problem.

timing

unexplained options

As for having a show-all-hotspots option, I imagine I'd rather prefer that. Too often in pixel-hunt games I find myself just sweeping the mouse all over the screen. The only way to know when I've found a hotspot is to watch the cursor for it to change, so I'm not even enjoying looking at the image. Then I can never be sure if I've found all the hotspots or not on a given screen. I would guess that way more than 50% of my time spent playing the game is spent just staring at the cursor looking for little blips. But ultimately this is just a question of how you want your game to play. Do you want more of a strategy or arcade type game. Strategy = know your choices, think about which you really want... Arcade = physically manipulate the controls properly to succeed... (Yes, pixel hunt isn't exactly true arcade, and if you find multiple options then you are back to including the strategy element. But, in my opinion, it's rather dependent on what percentage of game time I spend doing which task: moving the mouse to hunt for hotspots, contemplating my choices, and reading the actual story). I like arcade and strategy both. Just depends on which type of game you want this to be.