ExLibris wrote : An honourable first attempt. The main suggestion I'd make is that it needs something to make it stand out. At the moment it's just one of a number of very similar dating games and there's nothing particularly unique or memorable about it.
A couple of other observations
1. As already mentioned, the text needs to be thoroughly proofread. The spelling mistakes, irregular capitalisation and almost complete lack of punctuation make it painful to read in places.
2. Also as already mentioned, the meters for Attraction and Influence go up to 5, even though it's not possible to raise them higher than 3. If you do something that would raise them higher than 3, then Angry increases instead.
3. The threesome ending appears to be currently inaccessible. I have zero knowledge of Ren'py but it looks to me as though there's either a jump in the wrong place or the stat checks should be set to equal or greater than instead of equal to.
4. Is Influence ever tested?
5. Choosing 'that doesn't sound like me' when asking her what she looks for in a guy ends the game, but gives you the bedroom ending screen.
6. There are a lot of idiosyncracies, like her suddenly changing costume midway through a conversation, the player reacting as though he's never seen her car before even if he has, sequences being repeated and so on.
Thanks for you comments
I was building a much bigger and time consuming game before I started writing this one. This was to be a quick game to test the waters see how it is received and to see if it is worth doing the bigger one that is why it is not that outstanding the first one I was building has 6 different girls you can end up with more like a japanease hentai but was taking a long time so I put that on hold for this one. Although this has turned out much bigger than I expected lol it might seem short but there are pages and pages of code for this. and lots of images.
1. Punctuation has never been my strong point but I hope to get it proofread before releasing it.
2.those meters will not be visible in the finished game they are only there for testing to make sure i was getting the right variables that side of it all works fine what you see on the gauges is not the whole picture.
3. As stated earlier the Threesome ending is currently disabled as it is not finished but I have been working on it today should not be to much longer before I release it.
4. Influenced is used for all endings it takes a combination of all 4 stats not including angry for the endings to present themselves.
5. Thanks for that bug I think I have sorted that one out.
6. as for all the other points you mentioned I think I have sorted out the car issue will look into the unusual changing I have not hit that one in my testing there usually is no repeating scenes apart from the ones that require it.
Again thanks for you comments i will continue to bug fix and finish the threesome ending.
I have two other projects I have started on but am waiting to finish this one off before I spend some serious time with them also I don't have a lot of spare time so it can be difficult. I am about to go on holidays although I am getting married this weekend so I may not have a lot of time in the holdiays if you know what I mean lol